Brain Cookies

“Dialogue,” she said.

Posted on: March 1, 2018

I love dialogue.

There, I’ve said it. I’d say it again if I had to.

Dialogue is my favorite thing to read, and it is my favorite thing to write. But it has to be good dialogue.

Good dialogue pushes the story forward. It elevates characters off the page and into the 3D world. Good dialogue

The collage artist Lou Beach doesn’t write good dialogue. He writes amazing dialogue. He pares away all the nonsense–including those tiresome he saids and she saids. It’s startling in its immediacy. I think that’s because, in real life conversations, no one uses them.

(Can you imagine? Try it at home. Report the results in the comments.)

Anyway, Lou’s dialogue inspired me to write this short piece. It first appeared on Wicked Women in Words.

Oh, and seriously, check out Lou Beach Art on Facebook.

 

Deus 10

“Did you get the case of water that was under the cart?”

“Yeah.”

“Cool, thanks. I always forget the stuff under the cart.”

“I know. That’s why I got it.”

“Heh, yeah. Jeez, will you look at this guy? Blocking the whole lane. Just park in the lot, you idiot!”

“You were out late last night.”

“Was I?”

“I mean, 11:30 is pretty late for a couple drinks with the guys from the office. Don’t you think?”

“I dunno. Maybe, I guess? I wasn’t watching the clock.”

“Mmmhmm. What were you watching?”

“What?”

“You weren’t watching the clock, so what were you watching?”

“Do we need to pick up some dog food, or is there enough to last until I can get to PetSmart?”

“Don’t change the subject.”

“I’m not! I’m just asking so I know if I need to turn on Taylor or go straight home.”

“So what were you watching, Randy?”

“I’m just going home.”

“Randy, answer the question.”

“What question?”

“What. Were. You. Watching.”

“Uh, the game was on.”

“What game? Who was playing? Who won?”

“Look, we weren’t really watching it, it was just on, you know? It’s a bar.”

“What’s the name of the bar?”

“Um . . .”

“You don’t know the name of the bar?”

“Do you want anything from Starbucks?”

“There was no bar, was there?”

“You’re crazy. I’m getting a mocha.”

“You were with Sarah again.”

“What!?”

“We have to talk about this.”

“There’s nothing to talk about. Look, do you want Starbucks or no?”

“Are you still fucking my sister?”

“So that’s no Starbucks for you?”

“Shut the fuck up about fucking Starbucks! You can’t keep changing the subject and pretending nothing’s wrong. We’re going to have to deal with this . . . this situation. God, it’s like you think if you put it off long enough, something will happen to make me forget the last six months. Well guess what, Randy? You can’t avoid this. You can’t—”

 

Motor Vehicle Accident: Preliminary Report

Date/Time:                        2/18/18    11:32 am

Officer:                               Stanley Tarker, HHPD #390TS

Location:                            SE corner Clark St & 145th Ave

Description:                      Two vehicles:

(1)   1999 Honda Civic (white), lic HG8 874E

(2)   2012 Chevy Silverado (black), lic DEUS 10

Two fatalities on scene, one injured taken by bus to Mercy Gen

Cause unknown pending further investigation

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